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Writing for Coherence

Working as a lifeguard last summer was the best job I have ever had in my life. I had a chance to meet some of the very fascinating people. Two of them were Pual and Anna. Paul was another lifeguard who came from Somalia. While working with him, I learned a great deal about his culture. Anna was swim coach; she was the most hilarious person I have ever met. She always had great stories to tell about her days on the swim team in college. Along with other perks at the job, I also enjoyed free food from the snack bar. Getting a free lunch, certainly helped me cut costs. I also had the opportunity to see some free concerts that the pool was sponsoring. One of the bands was quite amazing. I plan to keep in touch with the drummer, who I think has quite a future in Indie music. By and large, the job was great, and I had a fabulous time. Hopefully, I am going back and work there once again next summer.

Writing for Unity

Last summer, my family experienced some incredible events during our trip to Disney World. We reached Disney World after 9 hours drive. At Disney World, fun time started with a friendly meeting with Mickey Mouse. We all kids have been waiting for this meeting all summer, and when we had finally gotten it, we took innumerous pictures with Mickey. In the evening, we have food at McDonalds. We had another fantastic experience next morning, when we visited the water park. My whole family had an exciting time splashing and riding the water slides. The most memorable part of the entire trip was seeing the fireworks at Epcot. We had a truly magical evening sitting together ...