Career

My goal is [rather than "My career goals are"] to attain a career where I can express my artistic talent and passion for art as well as open my mind in ways that I could never do in any other field [instead of "at any other career"]. To obtain these goals, I must set a track.[I'm not sure what this means--set a track?] After considering many other career opportunities [rather than "looking to many other vantage points resulting in faint success" which sounds somewhat negative], such as [delete "considering" here] the army, attempting to obtain a job at Boeing, and looking ...